A nice meditative read.

If I was writing it, I would find a personal story (that I lived or at least observed) that connected to this greater truth, that inspired you to these realizations.

I would change “fish, birds, animals and humans” to “fish, birds, mammals, including humans,” as we’re all animals.

I would take the quote marks away from the end bit, if that’s your own words (or give attribution if someone else’s).

I would give a title and subtitle (formatted with the big T and small T) at the beginning that helped people know what was coming if they clicked.

Also, there are a few basic copy editing issues, like two “and”s after yang and yin, so going over everything a few times could fix that up.

Hope this helps!

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